(Back story: The main character, Terrick, is a soldier tasked to guard a technician and pilot who were sent to a prison island when they heard of a break in the dome circling the island. When they arrived, they were ambushed and the pilot– Terrick's fiancee– was kidnapped by Saber Kortan, the ruthless king of the prison island known as Perdition. This scene takes place outside Saber's home, which Terrick is attempting to rescue Evie from.)
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Saber crouched down until he was eye level with my fiancée.
He grabbed a fistful of her hair and jerked her head back. She hissed and
pinched her eyes shut, her way of fighting the pain.
“You’re not in a position to bargain,” he remarked coldly. “That
chopper outside the dome can probably only carry three, anyway, right? You’re
gonna leave those friends behind and take me to the mainland.”
“No I’m not.”
Saber snarled and
lurched to his feet, dragging Evie up by her hair. ---
As challenging as this short has been (never let anyone say writing a short story is easy), I have to admit that I like said challenge. It's helped me think clearly and soldier on instead of giving up. Granted, this will be a huge kick in the gut if the submission isn't accepted, but if that happens, I can always save it for another time. Who knows what will come up later in the year?
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Amy
Well, you had me at dystopia-prison-escape-love story. I'm beyond intrigued! Can't wait to see how this story unfolds. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you! :)
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